Question

【题目】书面表达。（共l题，满分10分）

根据以下提示，以My friend为题，写一篇60词左右的短文。

Li Hong是我的朋友，在七年级2班。

他13岁，个子不高，留着短发，戴着眼镜。

他是上海人，和家人住在一起。

他喜欢打篮球，放学后经常和朋友们打篮球。

他最喜欢的篮球运动员是Jeremy Lin。

My friend

Answer 1

【答案】

My friend

I have a good friend, his name is Li Hong.

We are in the same school but we are in different classes.He is in Class 2,Grade 7.I am in Class 3,Grade 7.He is from Shanghai .He lives with his family now.He is 13 years old.He is not tall and has short hair .He often wears glasses.But he likes playing basketball very much ,so he always play basketball with his friends after school. His favorite basketball player is Jeremy Lin .He often see his games.Li Hong wants to be a famous basketball player like Jeremy Lin one day.I hope he can realize his dream

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文，文章的题目已经给出，而且列出了五条细节。写作文时要仔细审题，每一条都要写到。要注意前后句的连接，不要遗漏要点，并适当发挥。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，主语是第三人称，注意时态语时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

写作亮点：文章主要写我的朋友，要点全部都写出，并且增加了一些内容使文章更通顺，更符合要求。文中使用很多短语，让文章更加出彩，如realize his dream， one day.，in the same school ,wants to be a famous baketball player like等。在平时的学习中，要注意点滴积累，这样在写作文时才能灵活运用。