Question

【题目】（十五）

假设你是红星中学高三（1）的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“An Unforgettable Hike”的英文稿件。请根据以下四幅图的信息，叙述上周五你们学校组织的20公里远足活动的全过程。

注意：

1、文章的开头已为你写好。 2、词数不少于60。

An Unforgettable Hike

We took a 20-kilometer hike last Friday, and it has been one of the most unforgettable experiences since high school.

Answer 1

【答案】

We took a 20-kilometer hike last Friday, and it has been one of the most unforgettable experiences since high school. Early in the morning, we got together and set out on foot. All of us carried backpacks with water and food. At the beginning, we enjoyed the beautiful scenery and had a great time. Gradually we started to sweat a lot. Some of us became out of breath and some fell behind, but we encouraged each other to keep going. We kept at walking and walking. We just made it to school before one of my classmates fell down. All of us ran up to help her, having no time to attend to our tiredness. After another hour, we finally managed to walk back to school. We were so pleased and proud, cheering and hugging each other. We took photos to record the exciting moment.

What an unforgettable experience! It’s more than a hike. It’s a journey of hard work and challenge, in which we’ve learnt to be more determined and strong-minded.

【解析】

试题分析：本文的写作不难，对于叙事类文体，对文章的条理性要把握好，在写作过程注意使用“起承转合”的词语或是句型表达，多使用被动，倒装、虚拟来提升作文的美度。在平时写作时应该多进行阅读，对阅读过程中写的好的表达要进行积累，并且学以致用，勤积累，多背诵，这样作文才能使稳步的提升。

【亮点说明】范文中运用一些常见的短语set out出发；At the beginning开始；out of breath上气不接下气；manage to do 成功做成某事；We took a 20-kilometer hike last Friday, and it has been one of the most unforgettable experiences since high school.这个句子since high school所以用现在完成时；All of us ran up to help her, having no time to attend to our tiredness.这个句子having做伴随状语；What an unforgettable experience!这个句子用到感叹句。It’s a journey of hard work and challenge, in which we’ve learnt to be more determined and strong-minded这个句子用到in which 引导的非限制性定语从句；