Question

1．假如你叫王宇，明年六月份将从晨曦中学毕业，打算到耶鲁大学（Yale University）上学．现在请你根据下表的个人信息，用英语写一封信，申请留学并索要申请材料．

姓名：王宇	性别：男	出生年月：2000年5月
毕业学校：晨曦中学	学业：各门功课优秀
申请院校：耶鲁大学	申请专业：财务管理（financial management）
兴趣爱好：书法（calligraphy）、英语和篮球	电子邮箱：wangyu05@sina．com

注意：1．信件必须包括以上内容，不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯；
2．词数：100个左右．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Sir or Madam
I'm writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in financial management in your university．First，please allow me to make a brief introduction of myself．I'm Wang Yu，a boy born in May，2000．I'm graduating from the Chen Xi Middle School next June．I'm an all-A student with a keen interest in calligraphy and playing basketball．（高分句型一）Besides，I'm good at English．I know that The Yale University is ranked among the most famous universities in the USA，and that's the very reason why I'm now applying to further my university study in your Financial Management Department．（高分句型二）
I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information and send me the necessary application materials．（高分句型三）By the way，my email address is wangyu05@sina．com．
Looking forward to your reply．
Your sincerely，
Wang Yu．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇书信体裁的书面表达，要注意以下几点：1、注意书信的格式，而且书信的语言要简洁明了，开门见山提出写信的目的．2、题目要求很详细，注意不要遗漏表格中的信息，同时题文就是文章的写作目的．3、写信时语言要自然流畅，礼貌委婉，在内容方面可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯，4、为了提高档次还要注意句式的变换．
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达格式正确，作者第一句话就开门见山的提出了自己写信的目的，文章全面涵盖了所有要点，语言简洁明了、自然流畅．运用了许多句式，如I'm writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance 是in the hope that的从句，I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information运用了I would appreciate it if…的句式．词汇的运用也恰当合理，如further my study中的further是运用为动词，make a brief introduction简单介绍，an all-A student三好学生，a keen interest in热切的兴趣，have a good command of 对…有良好的掌握，rich experience丰富的经历．同时，一些连接词和短语如First，By the way，的使用也使文章更有条理性，衔接更加顺畅．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
       I'm writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in Financial Management in your university．
       First，please allow me to make a brief introduction of myself．I'm Wang Yu，a boy born in May，1994．I'm graduating from the Chen Xi Middle School next June．I'm an all-A student with a keen interest in calligraphy and playing basketball．（高分句型一）Besides，I'm good at English．I know that The Yale University is ranked among the most famous universities in the USA，and that's the very reason why I'm now applying to further my university study in your Financial Management Department．（高分句型二）
       I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information and send me the necessary application materials．（高分句型三）By the way，my email address is wangyu05@sina．com．
       Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                   Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                         Wang Yu

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．