Question

16．1．该刊的优点：语言完美，内容新鲜，图文并茂；
2．你的建议：刊登名人故事，指导英语学习．
注意：
1．词数100 左右；开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：刊登 carry
Dear Sir or Madam，
Congratulations on the tenth anniversary of English Readers!                                
I hope my suggestions will be taken into consideration．
Yours faithfully，
Li Hua

Answer 1

分析 本文是提纲类写作，要点已给出．写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系．根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩．
【亮点说明】文章结构严谨，语言简练，高级词汇、高级句式用在句中．I like the magazine because of the following reasons．复合介词because of用在句中，恰到好处；the language in the magazine is perfect，which is good for English learners．非限制性定语从句巧妙运用；the magazine keeps up with times，so we can learn about what have happened around the world．so引导的并列句和what引导的介词的宾语从句完美结合；it contains beautiful and vivid pictures，which makes reading it more interesting．再次使用非限制性定语从句；Would you please carry some inspiring stories about famous people in order to encourage readers？目的状语体现在句中；It would also be greatly appreciated if…，固定句式堪称经典；另外，Congratulations，First，Finally，However，的运用为文章增色添彩．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
       Congratulations on the tenth anniversary of English Readers!I'm a devoted reader of your magazine．I'm writing to express my opinions on your magazine．
        I like the magazine because of the following reasons．First，the language in the magazine is perfect，which is good for English learners．（高分句型一） Second，the magazine keeps up with times，so we can learn about what have happened around the world．Finally，it contains beautiful and vivid pictures，which makes reading it more interesting．（高分句型二）
       However，I still have some suggestions to make．Would you please carry some inspiring stories about famous people in order to encourage readers？It would also be greatly appreciated if you regularly offered some advice on English learning．（高分句型三）
       I hope my suggestions will be taken into consideration．
                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours faithfully，
                                                                                                                                                                                                   Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．