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手机和我们的生活越来越密切，让我们的联系变得更加方便，可有人认为手机并不利于真正的交流。校报英文版正在开展征文活动，发起对这一话题的讨论，你认为手机对人与人之间沟通的影响是利大于弊还是弊大于利？请你以“Mobile phones, good or bad for communication?”为题写篇短文向校报投稿，表达你的看法。
注意：1. 词数120左右；
2. 短文题目已拟好，不计入总词数；
2. 文中不可出现与本人相关的信息。
Mobile phones, good or bad for communication?
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Answer 1

a possible version：
Mobile phones, good or bad for communication?
The technology of mobile phones has made many things easier for people. Someone can reach us or we can call someone wherever we are. However, people are unaware of the negative effects of mobile phones on communication.
Due to the convenience of mobile phones, many people have started to engage in social interaction in person less than before. In addition, mobile phone communication lacks facial expressions and body language, without which communication becomes less personal. Consequently, some people get confused and nervous while talking to a person face to face because they mostly talk to people on mobile phones. They even do not know the manners of communication.
As far as I am concerned, we should use mobile phones in a wise way and try to avoid depending too much on them.

试题分析：本文要求就手机的利弊发表看法，话题贴近日常生活，属于话题作文。 对既定的话题进行讨论，学生有一定的自由发挥空间，可以畅所欲言，各抒己见。在谋篇布局时要注意文章的层次，可以从三个方面着手，分别说出使用手机的好处、坏处以及自己的看法。在词汇运用上尽量使用高级词汇和短语，比如advantage、disadvantage、make use of等。此外，要做到句式的多变和长短句的交错使用，比如强调句型、定语从句等，并且要恰当地穿插一些过渡性词语，以使文章自然、流畅。
【亮点说明】本文要点全面、内容充实、行文流畅、层次清晰，第一段说明了人们对于手机的两种不同看法，第二段讲述了使用手机的一些不良结果，第三段讲述了自己对于使用手机的看法。文章表达清楚，语言流畅，很好地完成了写作任务。此外本文恰当地使用了衔接用语，如： However, in addition, consequently ，As far as I am concerned等。在句式方面也做到了长短句结合，并且使用了复杂句式，如：some people get confused and nervous while talking to a person face to face because they mostly talk to people on mobile phones，体现了作者对语言的精准把握，有效的表达了丰富的信息，。