Question

假设你是李华，是高一年级学生会主席，开学以来发现同学早餐时间，课间都在学校超市买方便面等垃圾食品作为早饭，并吃完后随手扔得满校园都垃圾袋，你为此很担心。请你给校长写信，希望早餐期间，课间关闭超市，同时提出自己建议。内容提示：
写信理由
1．垃圾食品含脂肪，糖太高，对身体有害；
2．垃圾食品会导致癌症，心脏病；
3．塑料垃圾袋使得校园脏乱差。
你的建议
1. 早餐时间，课间关闭超市  2. 提倡学生养成良好的饮食习惯
注意：1．可适当增加细节，使短文连贯、通顺；
2．短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；
Dear President,
I’m LiHua in Grade one. Recently, I have noticed most of students have bought junk food from supermarket in stead of breakfast. I really worry about it.

Answer 1

Dear President,
I’m LiHua in Grade one. Recently, I have noticed most of students have bought junk food from supermarket in stead of breakfast. I really worry about it.
As we all know, junk food, such as instant noodles and hamburgers, is high in fat and sugar. So eating too much junk food is bad for us students’ health. Even worse, it not only can make students overweight but also can lead to some diseases, such as heart disease and cancer. Last but not least, the packing bags thrown by students make our school dirty.
In my opinion, supermarket should be closed at breakfast time and between classes. Our school should appeal that students develop a good eating habit to make sure that they have a balanced diet.
I’m looking forward to receiving your reply.
Yours,
LiHua

解析试题分析：考查提纲类作文，要求写一封建议信，要点都已经给出，就课间都在学校超市买方便面等垃圾食品造成学校环境问题的情况，给校长写一封信，同时提出自己建议。包括1．垃圾食品含脂肪，糖太高，对身体有害； 2．垃圾食品会导致癌症，心脏病； 3．塑料垃圾袋使得校园脏乱差。审题时注意本文使用的时态，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用省略句，倒装句和强调句型准确表述。如范文里面的As we all know, junk food, such as instant noodles and hamburgers, is high in fat and sugar.和 it not only can make students overweight but also can lead to some diseases,还有要用适当的关联词把文章串联起来：象Even worse, Last but not least,等等。
考点：考查提纲类短文写作。
点评：提纲类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括，不能有遗漏和省略。同时注意谋篇布局的顺序，词汇句型的选用，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。