Question

最近，你所在的研究性学习小组对全校3558名学生的心理健康状况进行了问卷调查，收到有效问卷3531份。请你根据所提供的信息用英语写一篇文章，向学校英语广播站投稿。

问题	有心理健康问题的学生：男生占总数的16.2% ，女生占11.4% 。 l 情绪问题（如过度焦虑、自卑等）：占总数的11.6% ， 其中， 女生比例较高； l 行为问题（如撒谎、偷窃等）：占总数的8.8% ， 其中， 男生比例较高。
原因	l 父母过多惩罚、过分干涉、家庭不和睦； l 自身学习压力过大、与周围的人际关系不融洽。
建议	不少于两点。

注意：

（1）  对设有要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。

（2）  词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。

（3）  作文中不得提及有关考生个人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。

  Our project group made a survey on the mental problems among the students in our school recently. We handed out questionnaires to all the 3558 students and collected 3531 valid ones.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Our project group made a survey on the mental problems among the students in our school recently. We handed out questionnaires to all the 3558 students and collected 3531 valid ones.

According to the statistics, 16.2 percent of the boys and 11.4 percent of the girls have psychological problems . 11.6 percent of them , a large percentage of whom are girls , suffer from emotional problems , such as feeling upset , lacking self-confidence and etc. 8.8 percent , most of whom are boys , have abnormal behaviors , such as lying , stealing and so on .

Various factors may account for this phenomenon. For one thing, some parents can’t build a harmonious family. Some have tight control of their children and punish them too often. For another, many students are under heavy pressure from study and unable to get along well with people around.

In my opinion, parents should give their children enough freedom and space and often communicate with them. Besides, schools are expected to establish campus counseling centers to offer timely help. Last but not the least , students had better keep optimistic and develop more hobbies.

【解析】

试题分析：本文的写作有一定的难点，信息量比较多，其中参杂有数字比例的表达。对本文首先对普遍出现的问题进行阐述，说明男女生各自的比例，其中主要使用像8.8 percent , most of whom are boys ,非限制性定语从句这样的表达来说明男生占比例的大部分；然后对出现这些现象的原因进行分析，按照提纲所给出的信息进行逐一的表达，也可以挑选几个主要的原因进行表达；最后提出自己的观点和建议，可以从家庭、学校、自身三方面进行提出解决的方法。

考点：提纲类写作

点评：本文的写作用注意对不会的表达进行替换，同时注意避免使用中式英文和硬译，如心理健康问题，不一定要把“健康”译出来，直接说psychological problems即可。对于高中作文的写作要注意多使用被动，倒装、虚拟来提升作文的美度。在平时写作时应该多进行阅读，对阅读过程中写的好的表达要进行积累，并且学以致用，勤积累，多背诵，这样才能作文才能稳步的提升。