Question

书面表达（满分25分）
5月 1日,高二(3)班的学生志愿者Li Yue 和Zhang Hua去阳光敬老院
(Sunshine Nursing Home)开展志愿者活动(送水果、打扫、聊天等)。假如你是校
英语报的记者李华,请按下列要点用英语写一则100-120个词的新闻报道.
注意:
1.时间、地点、人物活动；
2.老人们的反映；
3.简短评论；
4.报道的标题和记者姓名已给出.(不计词数)。
Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly
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By Li Hua, School Newspaper

Answer 1

Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly
On May Day,Li Yue and Zhuang Hua, students from Class Three, Grade Two, went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work. Upon their arrival, Li Yue and zhang Hua were warmly welcomed, and respectfully, they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits. Then, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor. Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people.
When it was time for the volunteers to leave the elderly people thanked them for their kindness. They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.
Li Yue and Zhang Hua were very happy. What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives.

试题分析：考生首先要仔细审题，包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，这是半开放性作文，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，这加大了写作难度。再者考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。考生要多使用复杂句，如范文里面的句子, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor.这句话用了非谓语动词。Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people.这句话用的是独立主格结构。
点评：作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合作文要求，句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。文中使用一些极佳的词语和句子为文章增色，使用高级词汇及句型。