Question

请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。

         In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

词数少于50，从总分中减去1分。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

         In the picture we can see a boy climbing a platform．He is taking great trouble to reach, die top of the stairs, ignoring the comparatively lower stairs beside him．

         The picture reminds me of those who dream of achieving great success every day．They are so eager to succeed that they hope to get to their destinations as quickly as possible．They don't realize there are longer but safer ways for them to make it．As a result, they may seem rather close to their goals, but the fact is on the contrary．

         In my opinion, we should focus on the process of fighting fop success．As long as every step is proper, sooner or later we will gain what we long for．

 【解析】

试题分析：本文是篇图画作文，图画非常简单，描绘了一个人想走捷径成功的做法。考生在写作之前认真思考内容是否充实、健康，思维活跃，逻辑清晰，语言规范，交际得体。还要注意文章的时态，这是我们日常生活中存在的一种现象，所以要用一般现在时。图片中的人是有些人的做法和想法，需要用第三人称；个人观点要用第一人称。再有就是应该注意使用较高级的句子和句子之间的连贯，以提高作文的档次。还要注意细节如拼写、标点符号或书写。词数要求等。

【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语为文章增色不少，比如remind me of... ，on the contrary，focus on, sooner or later，还运用了so...that 句式; who引导的非限制性定语从句等等。并注意了句子的衔接如：As a result，As long as  等等。值得我们借鉴学习。

考点：情景作文。