Question

根据一份调查显示, 现在各个高中学校中的高中生面临沉重的学习压力，因此，很多同学课间休息时间也坐在教室里学习，但效果并不理想。就此，英语周报举办一次征文活动，以劝诫这些同学：适当的休息很有必要。现请你以“The Break Between Classes”为题，按以下要求写一篇英语短文，让这些同学从中受到启发。要点如下：
请简要描述现象：很多同学在课间休息时间也坐在教室里学习，但效果并不理想；
十分钟的课间休息很有必要；
你是如何利用这十分钟休息时间的。
注意：词数100词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
The Break Between Classes
Time seems to be so limited for us senior high school students.
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Answer 1

Onea possible version：
The Break Between Classes
Time seems to be so limited for us senior high school students. Thus, with so much work to do, a great many students are always eager to seize every minute to study in and after class, including the ten-minute break. However, the outcome isn’t as satisfying as expected.       
As far as I know, we need the short break, of which the significance can’t be overlooked. As a matter of fact, the ten-minute break helps us keep a balance between study and relaxation. Short as the break is, we can refresh ourselves and get well prepared for the next class. Thus, there is no need to push ourselves to study even during the short ten-minute break.
Now I’d like to share with you my ten-minute break activities. During the ten minutes, I will walk out of the classroom, breathe the fresh air, and then make the preparations for the next class. Only in this way can I do my work remarkably well.

试题分析：本文属于提纲作文，要求以“The Break Between Classes”为题来写篇文章劝诫同学们要充分利用课间时间让大脑进行休息以获得更高的学习效率。文章共给出三个要点，在谋篇布局方面，可以采用三段式结构来分别对要点加以介绍，这样可以使文章层次清晰。在介绍每个要点时要充分发挥想象力，利用恰当的连接词或者过渡句以便使文章内容连贯，语言流畅。而且写作时还要尽量使用多种句式结构来丰富文章语言。此外，文章是介绍一种普遍存在的现象，所以可以使用一般现在时。文中可以使用的连接词有：therefore 、as a result 、however、thus等。可能使用的句型有：It is necessary for sb too sth； Oly in this way can we have a good rest。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达用三个段落分别阐述了三个要点，首先描述存在的现象，然后提出课间休息的必要性，最后介绍自己的做法并提出建议。作者的这种结构安排使文章段落清晰，层次分明。在语言方面，作者使用了丰富的句式结构，比如固定句型there is no need to push ourselves to study even during the short ten-minute break.，让步状语从句Short as the break is和倒装句Only in this way can I do my work remarkably well等，还有As far as I know，with so much work to do，As a matter of fact等大量短语的使用也使文章亮点纷呈，充分显示了作者深厚的语言功底。