Question

假如你叫李华，现正在美国加利福尼亚州上大学，你的一个朋友刘英写信向你了解美国加利福尼亚州的情况，请根据以下内容提示给他回信简介加利福尼亚州。

地理方面	面积42.4万平方千米，美国西部，西濒太平洋，美国面积第三大的州
人口方面	约38,000,000人； 据说15000前印第安人首先进入；16世纪欧洲人开始进入；19世纪中世界各地的人带着发财梦进入；未来将还会有人因喜爱加州的气候和生活方式进入。
语言方面	58% 的人把英语作为母语来讲，42%的人讲其它语言。

 
＊加利福尼亚州： California；太平洋：the Pacific；印第安人：Indians
【写作内容】
请根据以上内容给朋友写回信，内容包括：
1、加里福尼亚的地理方面的信息;
2、人口及其语言方面的信息;
3、信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入句子数。
【写作要求】
只能用5个句子表达全部内容。
【评分标准】
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯。
Dear Liu Ying,
Your letter reached me yesterday. You would like me to tell you something about California, so now I am writing to you.
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If you want to know more, you may go to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/California#History. Best wishes to you.
Yours ever,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
Your letter reached me yesterday. You would like me to tell you something about California, so now I am writing to you.
California, the third largest state in size in the USA with a population of more than 38 million, is located in the west of the United States on the Pacific in the west. It is said that the first settlers were Indians who got there 15000 years ago and only in the 16th century did Europeans come to settle. In the 19th century, people from all over the world came rushing into California with the dream of becoming rich. It is believed that in the future more people, attracted by the climate and lifestyle, will keep immigrating to California. As for language, only 58% of Californians speak English as their native language, while the others speak other languages.
If you want to know more, you may go to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/California#History
Best wishes to you.                                                                                                            Yours ever,

试题分析：考生首先要仔细审题，要点是以提纲形式出现的，做题时包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，这加大了写作难度。再者考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。因为只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。又要包括所有的要点，考生要多使用复杂句，一句话中要多包含些信息。
【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如would like sb to do, is located in还运用了It is said that…，It is believed that句式; who引导的定语从句及only in the 16th century did Europeans come to settle.倒装句等等。并注意了句子的衔接如：As for language等等。