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5．最近我校拟开展以"校园拒绝箏食"为主题的活动．假如你是该校学生会主席，请你以学生会的名义，参考下面的内容提示，给全校学生写一封倡议书．
内容提示：（1）描述吃零食的现象；
（2）阐述吃零食的影响；
（3）提出合理化的建议．
注意：（1）词数100左右，开头己为你写好（不计入总词数）．
（2）参考词汇：snacks零食：phenomenon现象．
Dear fellow students．
There is a serious phenomenon in our school．We find many students will crowd in the school store to buy snacks after each class．Some students even eat snacks in class．
Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money．（高分句型一）In addition，most snacks are unhealthy fond，for they contain too much fat and sugar．（高分句型二）Eating snacks improperly may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw the wrappers everywhere，which pollutes our campus．（高分句型三）
Dear fellow students，we shouldn't act like kids any more．We high school students should develop god habits．Remember that three regular meals a day as well as a balanced diet are essential for us．Let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks!
Students'Union．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息最近我校拟开展以"校园拒绝箏食"为主题的活动．假如你是该校学生会主席，请你以学生会的名义，参考下面的内容提示，给全校学生写一封倡议书，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：：（1）描述吃零食的现象；（2）阐述吃零食的影响；
（3）提出合理化的建议． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：crowd in 涌入；a waste of浪费；In addition另外；What is worse更糟的是；form good habits形成好的习惯
Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money．（高分句型一）
In addition，most snacks are unhealthy fond，for they contain too much fat and sugar．（高分句型二）
What is worse，some students throw the wrappers everywhere，which pollutes our campus．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear fellow students，
      There is a serious phenomenon in our school．We find many students will crowd in the school store to buy snacks after each class．Some students even eat snacks in class．
      Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money．（高分句型一）In addition，most snacks are unhealthy fond，for they contain too much fat and sugar．（高分句型二）Eating snacks improperly may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw the wrappers everywhere，which pollutes our campus．（高分句型三）
      Dear fellow students，we shouldn't act like kids any more．We high school students should develop god habits．Remember that three regular meals a day as well as a balanced diet are essential for us．Let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks!
                                                                                                                                                                                                            Students'Union

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．