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4．假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Lily在她的微博中说她为了减肥吃减肥药，而且经常不吃饭，导致身体变得很虚弱，状态很不佳．请你在她的微博上用英文给她留言，内容包括：
1．对她的现状表示担心；
2．指出吃减肥药以及经常不吃饭的坏处；
3．提出一些健康的减肥方法，如慢跑、定期到健身房健身等．
注意：1．词数100个左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：减肥药  weight-loss pill；  慢跑 jogging；  健身房 gym
Dear Lily，
I'm sorry to learn that you are upset about being overweight recently．
I think you should stop taking weight-loss pills in no time because they are harmful to your health．（高分句型一）Besides，you need to eat a healthy diet to recover your strength．There are many other ways to lose weight．For example，jogging is quite a popular form of exercise．You may do it in the morning or after supper．Another way is that you can go to the gym regularly，which is also an effective way of losing weight and keeping healthy．（高分句型二）
In a word，if you insist on exercising，you are sure to have an attractive figure and stay slimand healthy．（高分句型三）

Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Lily在她的微博中说她为了减肥吃减肥药，而且经常不吃饭，导致身体变得很虚弱，状态很不佳．请你在她的微博上用英文给她留言，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：对她的现状表示担心；指出吃减肥药以及经常不吃饭的坏处；提出一些健康的减肥方法，如慢跑、定期到健身房健身等．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：in no time立即，马上；be harmful to 对…有害；Besides另外；In a word总之；insist on坚持；
 I think you should stop taking weight-loss pills in no time because they are harmful to your health．（高分句型一）
Another way is that you can go to the gym regularly，which is also an effective way of losing weight and keeping healthy．（高分句型二）
    In a word，if you insist on exercising，you are sure to have an attractive figure and stay slim and healthy．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Lily，
       I'm sorry to learn that you are upset about being overweight recently．
       I think you should stop taking weight-loss pills in no time because they are harmful to your health．（高分句型一）Besides，you need to eat a healthy diet to recover your strength．There are many other ways to lose weight．For example，jogging is quite a popular form of exercise．You may do it in the morning or after supper．Another way is that you can go to the gym regularly，which is also an effective way of losing weight and keeping healthy．（高分句型二）
       In a word，if you insist on exercising，you are sure to have an attractive figure and stay slim and healthy．（高分句型三）
                                                                  
Yours'
                                                                     LiHua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．