Question

5．一家英语报社向中学生征文，主题是"十年后的我"，请根据下列提示并适当发挥想象，展望未来的生活．
1．家庭：与现在不同．XXX岁，有自己的家庭，也许有一个可爱的孩子．
2．工作：在电脑公司担任程序设计员，喜欢这份工作并且与同事相处融洽．
3．业余生活…（需补充3项内容）．
注意：1、词数100左右；
2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3、开头语已为你写好．
I think my life will be very different in ten years．                                      

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一）I often imagine what my life will be like in the future．
该句型imagine后加一个宾语从句，从句中用what引导，作为be like 的宾语，意思是将来生活会是什么样子．
（高分句型二）I'll do a good job in whatever I do．
介词in后加一个宾语从句，whatever等于anything that，意思是无论我做什么．
本篇范文短小精悍，要点全面，语言简练，时态人称准确，很好的完成了写作任务．在文章开头作者紧扣题目，提出自己对未来的畅想，然后从生活，工作，家庭三个方面描述了自己十年后的生活．在文中作者用到了短语In my free time，In a word，such as等介词短语，避免了文章句式的单一．此外，还用到了宾语从句in whatever I do、I will work in a computer company as a program designer等，这些都给朴素的语言带来了亮点．

解答 One Possible Version：
（高分句型一）I often imagine what my life will be like in the future．I think my life will be very different in ten years．I will be twenty-eight years old by then．I will have my own family，probably with a lovely child．I hope I'll work in a computer company as a program designer．I'll enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues．（高分句型二）I'll do a good job in whatever I do．In my free time，I'll continue to take regular exercise，such as swimming，running and various ball games．On my holidays，I'll travel around the world．In a word，my life will be much richer and more colorful．

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．