Question

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
Scientists find that hard-working people live longer than average men and women. Career women are healthier than housewives. Evidence shows that the jobless are in poorer health than the job-holders. A study shows that whenever the employment rate increases by 1%, the death rate decreases correspondingly(相应地) by 2%. All this comes down to one point: work is helpful to health.
Why is work good for health? It is because work keeps people busy, away from loneliness. Researches show that people feel unhappy, worried and lonely when they have nothing to do. Instead, the happiest are those who are busy. Work serves as a bridge between man and reality. By work, people come into contact with each other. By collective activities, they find friendship and warmth. This is helpful to health. The loss of work means the loss of everything. It affects man spiritually and makes him likely to disease.
Besides, work gives one a sense of fulfillment and a sense of achievement. Work makes one feel his value and status in society. When a writer finishes his writing or a teacher sees his students grow, they are happy beyond words.
[写作内容]
1.以约30个词概括短文的要点；
2.然后以约120个词就“努力学习，快乐生活”的主题发表看法，并包括如下要点：
(1)你赞同“努力学习也可以快乐生活”这一观点吗？简要阐述理由。
(2)举例说明你的同学是如何努力学习并保持健康乐观的心态的？
(3)简述如何才能做到努力学习并快乐生活？
[写作要求]
1. 在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
[评分标准]  概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

Study hard and enjoy yourselves
The author highlights the effect of work on people’s health, because it can rid one of loneliness, and make one feel fruitful and proud of himself, which always contributes to a good body.
In common with the author, I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be, as hard work can keep a person busy, and give one a sense of achievement, hence he will be self-confident and feel happy.
Around me, some of my classmates work very hard, hoping to fulfill their dream. However, they don’t seem unhappy. Oppositely, they try to find fun even under the pressure of the NMET. For example, they may share the joy with others when working out a problem. Sometimes they may play a trick on his partner using the newly-learned idioms, thus refresh themselves quickly.
As for me, I think only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard and meanwhile enjoy ourselves.

试题分析：本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮点说明】The author highlights the effect of work on people’s health, because it can rid one of loneliness, and make one feel fruitful and proud of himself, which always contributes to a good body.这句话有原因状语从句和非限制性定语从句， In common with the author, I agree that the harder you work, the happier you will be, as hard work can keep a person busy, and give one a sense of achievement, hence he will be self-confident and feel happy.这句话有宾语从句，原因状语从句，还有hence这样的高级词汇，和in common with、这样的词组。Around me, some of my classmates work very hard, hoping to fulfill their dream. 这句话是现在分词做状语， they may share the joy with others when working out a problem. 这句话用的是状语从句的省略，Sometimes they may play a trick on his partner using the newly-learned idioms, thus refresh themselves quickly.这句话也是现在分词做状语,As for me, I think only when we truly experience what fun it is, can we spare no effort to study hard and meanwhile enjoy ourselves.这句话用的是倒装句。