Question

4．请以"One person I'm grateful to"为题，用英语写一篇100-120个词的短文，记述一个你认为值得感谢的人．要求如下：
1．内容必须结合生活中的一个事例；
2．简要说明值得感谢的原因或从中得到的启示；
3．文中不得透漏个人信息．
注意：文章的标题已给出（不计词数）．
One Person I'm Grateful to
                                                                        

Answer 1

分析 本文主语开放性的作文，话题是"One person I'm grateful to"．这个人可以是现实中的人也可以是文学作品中某个人物．考生可以叙述身边人物的具体事例来说明自己感激的人的具体品质．在范文中，作者选择了自己的英语老师为例．在完成开放性作文时，首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在你的能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，因为这样你才可以更好的驾驭．同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides，further，last but not least等．在发表个人观点的时候，可以使用谚语来提升整个文章的档次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性．
【亮点说明】本文最大的亮点在于高级词汇的使用，如be supposed to do sth应该做某事；dedicate oneself to…．专心于…；regardless of不管，不顾…；gain confidence赢得自信；高级句式的使用也较为频繁，如which worried me a lot．中的which引导的是非限制性定语从句．以及Having beenpersuaded to change my attitude，I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessnessand gained confidence as well．中的非谓语动词having beenpersuaded…用法．
We are supposed to be grateful to people who arealways there with us because they are the charming gardeners who make our soulsblossom．（高分句型一）
During the previous study，my biggest flaw must come tocarelessness，which worried me a lot．（高分句型二）
Having been persuaded tochange my attitude，I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessnessand gained confidence as well．（高分句型三）
 I am grateful to my English teacher for all thesupport he has given me，which has made me stronger and a better person．（高分句型四）

解答 We are supposed to be grateful to people who arealways there with us because they are the charming gardeners who make our soulsblossom．（高分句型一）
       My English teacher is such a great soul，to whom I owemany thanks．During the previous study，my biggest flaw must come tocarelessness，which worried me a lot．（高分句型二）To make matters worse，I was too anxiousto seek the fundamental reason for my failure．I just dedicated myself to hugeamounts of practice，regardless of repeated mistakes．Fortunately，my teachernoticed it and offered to have a long talk with me．Having been persuaded tochange my attitude，I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessnessand gained confidence as well．（高分句型三）
       I am grateful to my English teacher for all thesupport he has given me，which has made me stronger and a better person．（高分句型四）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．