Question

在日常生活中，你看到身边有哪些不良现象？请列举一些并就某些方面说说你的做法和想法。
提示：speak loudly, cut in line(插队), waste food, unfriendly(冷漠的), offer no help…
要求：1. 参考提示语，可适当发挥；
2. 语句通顺，意思连贯，书写工整。
3. 文中不得出现真实姓名和地名；
4. 词数：不少于80词。（开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数）
In our daily life, I usually see some bad behavior around us. For example,                 
                                                                             
                                                                            
I think if everyone can think more of others, we’ll have a better living environment.

Answer 1

One possible version：
In our daily life, I usually see some bad behavior around us. For example, I often hear people speak and laugh loudly in public. It is too noisy. Some people cut in line while others are waiting. It makes me unhappy. And in our school dining hall, I often see students waste food. At times, people seem unfriendly and offer no help when others are in trouble. For me, my parents are strict with me. They often tell me to behave well. So I never drop litter about. And I never draw on the desk or on the wall. I am polite to old people.
I think if everyone can think more of others, we’ll have a better living environment.

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，介绍自己身边的不良现象以及自己的想法和做法。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时态，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：I often hear people......;Some people......;people seem unfriendly......;So I never ......等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系，注意使用所提示的短语。
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头介绍了自己身边有一些不良现象，接下来介绍自己的做法，最后说出自己的想法，每个人要多为他人着想。此处用了speak and laugh loudly ，cut in line ， waste food，offer no help，are strict with， am polite to等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。