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14．假如你是Li Ming，今年暑假你将作为交换生到英国姐妹学校学习、生活两周．到时候，你将作为通州学生代表用英文介绍自己的家乡通州．请根据下面提供的信息，用英语写一篇演讲稿．
要点：1．通州是个美丽的现代化城市，离上海大约一个半小时的车程．
2．到处可见绿树、河流和高楼．
3．街道开阔，两边有很多各种商店．
4．居住条件有很大改进（improve），现在人们大多住在公寓里面．
5．你家的居住情况及你的感受：…（内容请自拟）．
注意：1．以第一人称口吻介绍；
2．讲话稿应包括所给要点，可适当发挥，要求意思连贯、语句通顺；
3．词数：90左右，讲话稿的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear all，
I am an exchange student from Tongzhou，China．I am very happy today to have the chance to introduce my hometown Tongzhou!
Tongzhou is a beautiful and modern city．It's about half an hour's ride from Shanghai to my hometown．You will see a lot of green trees，rivers and tall buildings everywhere．There are wide streets with many different shops on both sides．
Now people's living condition has improved a lot．Most people live in the flats．I live in a tall building near the bus station．My home is on the ninth floor．Although it is not big，it is very beautiful and comfortable．I like my own bedroom very much．I often listen to music in the bed．
Welcome to Tongzhou!Welcome to my home!
Thanks!

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是写一篇演讲稿介绍自己的家乡通州．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第三人称和第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．通州是个美丽的现代化城市，离上海大约一个半小时的车程．
2．到处可见绿树、河流和高楼．
3．街道开阔，两边有很多各种商店．
4．居住条件有很大改进（improve），现在人们大多住在公寓里面．
5．你家的居住情况及你的感受：…
常用到的重点短语：
there be 有
 a lot of许多
listen to 听
from…to…从…到…
【高分句型】
1．①There are wide streets ②with many different shops on both sides．
①there be 有，表存在．
②with many different shops 做定语，修饰前面的streets．
2．Although it is not big，it is very beautiful and comfortable．
although表示虽然，引导让步状语从句．

解答 Dear all，
I am an exchange student from Tongzhou，China．I am very happy today to have the chance to introduce my hometown Tongzhou!
Tongzhou is a beautiful and modern city．（美丽的现代化城市）It's about half an hour's ride from Shanghai to my hometown．（离上海大约一个半小时的车程）You will see a lot of green trees，rivers and tall buildings everywhere（到处可见绿树、河流和高楼）．There are wide streets with many different shops on both sides．（街道开阔，两边有很多各种商店．）【高分句型】
Now people's living condition has improved a lot．Most people live in the flats．I live in a tall building near the bus station．My home is on the ninth floor．（居住条件有很大改进）Although it is not big，it is very beautiful and comfortable．【高分句型】I like my own bedroom very much．I often listen to music in the bed．（你家的居住情况及你的感受）
Welcome to Tongzhou!Welcome to my home!
Thanks!

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．