Question

4．雷锋同志说过："我要把有限的生命，投入到无限的为人民服务之中去．"请以"Everyone Needs Help"为题，写一篇作文．

要求：◆词数：80个左右．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数；
◆书写工整，拼写、语法正确，内容层次分明．
◆全文中不要提及真实的校名和人名．
Everyone Needs Help
In our daily life，we will meet different kinds of people，no matter at home，in school，or at some otherplaces．Everyone needs help，I think．I got much help from my parents，myfriends，my teachers，my classmates and so on，even some strangers．Forexample，my parents often help me wash clothes，my teachers often give me helpin learning．At the same time，I also help others．I help my parents put awayour clothes，I lend something to my classmates．It's happy to help others．Weshould help each other．I tell you a story．
One day I saw a little girl in the street carrying aheavy schoolbag on her back．She was walking happily．Then suddenly an old manfell down while he was crossing a street．She ran towards him at once，but shewas too short to help him to stand．I helped her and we together brought theold man to safety．He thanked us over and over．I think the little girl was，though very young，a very warm-hearted person．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"Everyone Needs Help"为题通过亲身经历说说雷锋精神．时态主要为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1别人帮助过你吗？
2你帮助过别人吗？
3一次经历
常用到的重点短语：
help sb do sth 帮某人做某事
at the same time 同时
lend sth to sb 借某物给某人
too…to do sth太…而不能…
【高分句型】
1．Then suddenly an old man①fell down ②while he was crossing a street．
①fall down 摔倒
②while引导的时间状语从句表过去的动作正在进行中．
2．She ran towards him ①at once，but she was ②too short to③help him to stand．
①at once立刻 马上
②too…to do sth太…而不能…
③help sb  to do sth 帮某人做某事

解答 Everyone Needs Help
 In our daily life，we will meet different kinds of people，no matter at home，in school，or at some other places．Everyone needs help，I think．I got much help from my parents，myfriends，my teachers，my classmates and so on，even some strangers．For example，my parents often help me wash clothes，my teachers often give me help in learning．（别人帮助过我）At the same time，I also help others．I help my parents put away our clothes，I lend something to my classmates．（我帮助过别人）It's happy to help others．We should help each other．I tell you a story．
One day I saw a little girl in the street carrying a heavy schoolbag on her back．She was walking happily．Then suddenly an old man fell down while he was crossing a street．【高分句型】She ran towards him at once，but she was too short to help him to stand．【高分句型】I helped her and we together brought the old man to safety．He thanked us over and over．I think the little girl was，though very young，a very warm-hearted person．（一次经历）

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．