Question

假如你在学校举行的英语演讲比赛中获得了好成绩，将在颁奖仪式上发言，请用英语写一篇发言稿，要点如下：
参赛目标是否实现
取得好成绩的两点主要原因
演讲中发现的自己的不足之处及改进办法
注意：1.字数120左右
2．发言稿的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Good afternoon,everyone!
It is an honour for me to speak here.
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
Thank you !

Answer 1

Good afternoon ,everyone!
It is an honour for me to speak here.And I am excited because I have achieved my goal to come first in the contest.
Firstly,I should owe my success to my teachers and all those who helped me in the preparation for the contest.Thank you all!Secondly,my success is closely connected with my love of English.I hold that the love from the heart can really make a difference.
Anyhow,the experienceof the contest helps me understand some of my shortcomings.One of them is that my limited knowledge weakens the power of my speech.So I have determined to study harder to broaden my knowledge and learn more about the world.
Thank you !

试题分析：这是一篇发言稿，所以在语言的使用上要大众化，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点比较简略,故需要充实文章内容，需要注意不要偏离文章中心。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式。
【亮点说明】范文使用了一些高级词汇短语：owe one’s success to sb.将成功归功于…，be closely connected with和…有密切的关联，make a difference.有影响。 determine to do sth.决心做…，范文还使用了好的句型：I should owe my success to my teachers and all those who helped me in the preparation for the contest.这句话用了定语从句， One of them is that my limited knowledge weakens the power of my speech.这句话用了表语从句，还有文章还使用了Firstly, Secondly,这样的关联词使文章更加连贯。