Question

假如你是高中生李华，请根据以下要点，以日记的形式，叙述你在5月15日（周六）参加在乡下草莓采摘节（Strawberry-picking Festival）的活动情况。
你到达草莓园的方式，时间，及当时的天气状况；
你在草莓采摘节的所见所闻。
注意：日记格式已给出；词数120左右；可适当增加细节以使行文连贯
Saturday, May15                                               Sunny
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Answer 1

Today, a sunny day, Li Ming and I went to the countryside by bus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival, which started at 8 o”clock in the morning.
When the organizer announced the rules of the festival, we were led into the strawberry garden by beautiful girls in red, group by group. While walking along the country road, we saw the beautiful flowers and heard the birds singing. The air was much fresher and cleaner than that in the city we are living in. During the festival, we enjoyed sweet strawberries, watched some exciting performances and learned many stories about the town and its kind people. At about five in the afternoon, we had to say goodbye to the garden and went back home. Both Li Ming and I enjoyed ourselves and hoped to visit the again soon.
What an unforgettable day!

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来.本作文中给出的要点不是很具体,故需要考生进行扩展，并准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。Li Ming and I went to the countryside by bus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival, which started at 8 o”clock in the morning.这句话用了非限制性定语从句，While walking along the country road, we saw the beautiful flowers and heard the birds singing.这是状语从句的省略式，
点评：本文属于提纲类作文，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。