Question

11．教育部征集高中生对于高中毕业后不直接上大学而是休整一年（gap year）的意见和看法．你作为光明中学的班长李华整理了同学们的意见并给教育部回信．要点如下：
1．同学们非常支持休整一年，希望拥有这一年的自由时光．
2．同学们在这一年里准备做什么．
3．度过休整年的优点．
注意：
1．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数；
2．字数：100词左右．
Dear sir，
I'm LiHua from Guang Ming Middle School．I'm writing to tell you 
                 ．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息针对高中毕业后不直接上大学而是休整一年（gap year）的意见和看法，作为光明中学的班长李华整理了同学们的意见并给教育部回信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：同学们非常支持休整一年，希望拥有这一年的自由时光；同学们在这一年里准备做什么；度过休整年的优点．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：
I'm writing to tell you what we high school students think of having the gap year．（高分句型一）句中使用了what引导的宾语从句
Others prefer to take some jobs so that they are able to make some money and be economically independent．（高分句型二）句中使用了so that引导的结果状语从句
By doing what is mentioned above，we students will not only enrich our life and social experience but also temper our sense of independence．（高分句型三）句中使用了not only…but also 连接词

解答 Dear sir，
     I'm LiHua from Guang Ming Middle School．I'm writing to tell you what we high school students think of having the gap year．（高分句型一）
     Above all，most of us students consider it a brilliant idea to have a gap year before we finally go to our dream college．Some students will travel around our country or even the whole world to relieve the tension and pressure caused by senior academic study．Others prefer to take some jobs so that they are able to make some money and be economically independent．（高分句型二）Still others choose to read more books about their majors they are going to study in university．
     By doing what is mentioned above，we students will not only enrich our life and social experience but also temper our sense of independence．（高分句型三）In one word，we can't wait to spend the gap year in our own way．
                                                                                                                                                    Yours truly，
                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧