Question

假如你叫李华,打算毕业后到美国留学,请给你的美国笔友 Tom写一封电子邮件,内容主要包括: 1.留美原因------增长见识,体验美国文化;
2.目前困扰------语言障碍,大学学业压力;
3.征求对方建议。
注意: 1.词数100左右;
2.可以适当添加细节,以使行文连贯;
3.不要逐字逐句翻译;
4.邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。
Dear Tom,
I’ve finally made up my mind to go to America for further study after graduation. _______________
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Tom,
I’ve finally made up my mind to go to America for further study after graduation. I’ve been longing to go to America, mainly for two reasons. One is that I want to experience American culture, which is believed to be the most diverse in the world, and the other is that I hope to broaden my horizon in this developed country.
But to tell you the truth, I have some worries about this. I don’t have a good command of English, especially spoken English, so I’m afraid I’ll have difficulty fitting in very soon. Besides, I may suffer from high pressure from college courses, which I’m not sure I can handle.
With so many things bothering me, I hope you can offer me some practical advice.
Looking forward to your reply. 
Yours,
Li Hua

试题分析：考查应用文中的书信的写作。要求向你的笔友Tom写一封电子邮件。介绍你想去美国留学的原因和现在的困惑，并向对方征求意见。要点都已经给出，注意本文使用一般现在时，描述要尽量选择简洁的语言，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用高级词汇和固定短语准确表述。句式上要富有变化，简单句和复杂句结合使用，还要用适当的连接词被句子连接起来，象for instance, Furthermore,等词，这样文章显得更连贯。
【亮点说明】One is that I want to experience American culture, which is believed to be the most diverse in the world, and the other is that I hope to broaden my horizon in this developed country.这句话用了并列句，表语从句和定语从句， I don’t have a good command of English, especially spoken English, so I’m afraid I’ll have difficulty fitting in very soon.这句话用了词组“have a good command of”精通，和结果状语从句，I may suffer from high pressure from college courses, which I’m not sure I can handle.这句话用了非限制性定语从句， With so many things bothering me, I hope you can offer me some practical advice.这是with复合结构。还有文章还使用了关联词But to tell you the truth, Besides,使文章更加连贯。