Question

【题目】假如你是李华。请你给校报编辑写一封建议信。内容如下：

1．春节是中国最重要的传统节日。在七天的假期中，亲朋好友喜欢欢聚一堂，吃吃喝喝，开心地玩乐。

2．问题：有些人过度饮食，增重不少；有些人整日整夜玩游戏、玩纸牌。

3．建议：保持平衡的饮食,有益于健康；选择户外运动或全家旅游，过一个健康有意义的春节。

Dear editor,

The Spring Festival is the most important traditional festival in China .

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Your sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear editor,

The Spring Festival is the most important traditional festival in China. During the seven-day holiday, all the families and friends love to get together to eat ,drink and have fun with each other.

But at the same time, some people will eat and drink too much. It’s easy for them to put on weight. Some people spend most of the time sitting still, playing games and card games day and night.

To have a healthy and meaningful Festival, I suggest that, for one thing , people should keep a balanced diet and try to avoid rich food and overeating during the festival，which is of great benefit to their health. Why not go out with the families and friends, such as ,taking a walk in the mountains, to breathe fresh air and admire the scenery as well? Doing outdoor activities is a good way to help you relax both mentally and physically. I bet that people will get refreshment afterwards. There are many other choices, too. Family tour is the one if you like.

I hope you find my advice useful and have a happy,healthy and meaningful Spring Festival

Your sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】本文要求学生以李华的名义给校报编辑写一封建议信，要点包括：1．春节是中国最重要的传统节日。在七天的假期中，亲朋好友喜欢欢聚一堂，吃吃喝喝，开心地玩乐。2．问题：有些人过度饮食，增重不少；有些人整日整夜玩游戏、玩纸牌。3．建议：保持平衡的饮食,有益于健康；选择户外运动或全家旅游，过一个健康有意义的春节。书信类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括，不能有遗漏和省略。但是要点只是提纲，考生还要在此基础上增加细节，不要逐字逐句翻译，同时注意谋篇布局的顺序，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目，让文章更有文采。

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