Question

今年，你将高三毕业。为使即将升入本校的高一新生的高中生活更顺利，学校的《英语学习园地》请你给他们留言，提出一些中肯的建议。请根据下面的提示，用英语写一篇短文。
1．合理分配学习、锻炼和休息时间；
2．搞好与老帅和同学之间的关系；
3．积极参加校社团活动。
注意：1．词数：不少于100词；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Answer 1

One possible version:
Here are some suggestions for you ,which may help you enjoy your school life better.
As senior high school students. You will be living a very busy life. So first of all ，you should arrange your time properly .You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest. Only in this way can you make good use of every minute .Besides ,while in school，it is wise to develop a pleasant relationship with teachers and classmates .When you have a problem that you can’t work it out alone ,you’d better turn to your teachers or classmates for help .Of course you should lend a helping hand when necessary .Last but not least ,I advise you to take an active part in societies at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves.
I hope the suggestions above will help you go through a rich and colorful school life .I’m sure that a beautiful future is waiting you.

试题分析：本文是一篇提纲式命题作文，要求给学校的《英语学习园地》请你给他们留言，提出一些中肯的建议。命题中给出了三个写作要点,因此考生需要仔细审题，把握主题，写作中要包含所有提示要点，根据要点进行适当的合理的发挥和想象。文章要注意遣词造句，注重句式变化，调动自己多年以来的英语积累和语言储备，写出富于变化，有利于高中生活的短文。结合所给材料,可知本文主要是用一般现在时态进行叙述,人称以第二人称为主.由于是提供建议,写作中注意使用连词,或者序数词,做到上下文联系紧密,符合逻辑关系.
【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如living a very busy life, take an active part in;短语Only in this way can you make good use of every minute的倒装句及when引导的时间从句等等。并注意了句子的衔接如：So first of all , Besides，Last but not least等等。